This is a much better version than the other and this has really improved the work as a whole. I think that the proportions are probably quite good and I feel it's portrayed realistically. I haven't seen many portraits drawn face on but obviously because it's a self portrait it seems most logical. I presume the detail to the side of the face to include shadows was intentional and it gives it some depth.
The nose is probably better than any of my attempts. I usually dread the facial features and hair can take a long time to master as it's so intricate. My favourite part of this is your attention to your clothing and perhaps it offers an edge as the patterns are interesting. The only thing I will point out is the hair at the end is a little frayed and the quality of line isn't as good. Unless this was intentional in respect to the original picture I think a bit more variety here of tone would make that area stand out more.
Overall I have admiration because if I started a drawing today on a self-portrait I would probably end up stressed and give up after a short while as I find it so difficult.
Its face on because my art teacher wanted me to do a self-portrait and took a picture which I drew from lol
The clothes i changed from the original photo because the came out just black in black and white and that was the only interesting thing i had - i really enjoyed doing the pattern and it was a nice change from all the delicate stuff in the face.
I agree about the hair - its odd my teacher pointed that out to me just yesterday I don't really want to do any more to it now I've kind of classed it as "finished" in mind but i suppose i should.
And I did get very stressed with it - ended up crying at one point but thats just me, I've learnt if i give up because i get stressed i never do anything!
I am the same. I generally don't go back to pieces. With practise you'll generally pick up these things anyway. It's really just a journey to see how you've progressed for any viewers, though critique does help bring some things to the forefront. I am glad you've adopted that way of going about it because getting stressed is often futile. Usually if it gets to that point it means you need a break.